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8 thoughts on “Comment Wall for Storybook

  1. Howdy Grant!
    You’ve got some great stuff working here in your storybook. Just to get it out of the way, I’ve gotta say I absolutely lost when I clicked through that link to the Achilles flash game. I wasted so many hours playing that game when I was a kid. Moving on to your actual storybook though, I love that you went the interactive story route. I had kinda wanted to try it out myself, but I just couldn’t figure a way to make the stories I wanted to tell work with it. I really appreciate you adding in the “(storybook)” notation on the option you need to take to continue the storybook. That way, if they want, the reader can run through the “correct” path in a streamlined manner instead of running down dead end paths and having to jump back a few pages and reorient before moving on. Last but not least, concerning the content itself, I think the idea of Odyssey side adventures sounds really promising. I can’t wait to see where this storybook goes!

  2. Hi GD, I am really confused about your storybook. I do not know if I simply cannot find your story or if it is not there yet? I clicked all of the buttons for the storybook from your introduction page but when I finally go to click on first, second, and third bard nothing comes up besides “double-click this passage to edit”. If this is simply my navigation error I apologize, but if not please fix this soon so we can all read your story because I went ahead and read some of your past blog stories and you did very good! I really want to see what you have written so if you don’t mind send me a quick email when it is fixed or point me in the right direction so that I may leave you some good feedback!

    1. Apologies for the confusion. I do not have any stories up at this time, just the Twine game introduction. Story 1 (Bard 1) will likely be coming in Week 8!

  3. Hey Grant,
    So, I was feeling pretty good about my storybook. I’ve got some fancy google maps embedded, and some cool banner images and even a nice GIF in my first story. But then I go to look at yours, and now I think mine is underwhelming in comparison. Your interactive take on the storybook is the most interesting one I’ve seen so far. Even though the actual story has not begun yet, I really enjoyed clicking through all of the screens and going back to choose different options. I felt like I was playing an old fashioned quest game more than I was reading a story!. I definitely want to return to your storybook at a later time to see how it unfolds. Aside from already loving the style, The Odyssey is a classic tale that I enjoy. Great job Grant and keep up the awesome work

  4. Hi Grant! I just read your storybook, and I thought it was fantastic! The Odyssey is one of my favorite stories, and I have a lot of nostalgia for it because my Dad read it to me. I thought you did a fantastic job retelling it, and it was a joy to read it again! Your site design is so well done, and I really enjoyed the images you selected. I especially like the image of Kobalos. Great Job!

  5. Hi GD!
    Your storybook is amazing! I am also writing about Homer’s work, although I am focusing on the women—Helen, Cassandra, and Andromache—of The Iliad and not the lesser known quests of Odysseus in The Odyssey. Your introduction was great! Having the two options to choose from, with each one affecting the decisions you can make after was amazing. I also like the way you wrote about everything that was happening in the first person. Usually, I don’t like it when authors do that, but I really liked the way your storybook turned out! Your author’s notes were very informative, and definitely added information to the story. They weren’t just there because they were required, they were there because they were needed to provide background information on the things Odysseus was experiencing. I like how you added a side quest to his stories as well. Overall, fantastic job! I can’t wait to read your next stories!

  6. Hi Grant! I’m here from the Indian Epics class, but I wanted to read your storybook because mine also includes an adapted part of the Odyssey. I absolutely love what you’ve done! First, your website looks great, and I love the Twine introduction. It really put me in the scene. I also liked playing the little Achilles game that you had hidden there, too, haha. As for your stories, I loved how you had Odysseus narrate some new episodes from his journeys. They were all in really creative parts that showed some new details that influence the story. Your author’s notes are also very detailed and helped remind me of some things from the original stories that I’d forgotten, so good job there. Your pictures are also very appropriate and placed in smart spots where they enhance the story but don’t cause distraction. I don’t really have any suggestions for you, and I can’t wait for your third story to finish it off. You’ve done some excellent work!

  7. Hello Grant. Cool storybook. I like how interactive it was. I could tell that you have put a lot of work into it. I am from the Indian Epics class, so I have not had the opportunity to read your story, but I am still somewhat familiar with the Odyssey. I read the story The Bewitching Queen, and I really liked it. The first think I liked is how you have a short paragraph to set the scene. This way I knew what was happening and was able to easily understand the events that were unfolding in the story. I also like how the story is told in the first person. This way the reader can really know what is going on in Odysseus’s head. I also like how you describe Odysseus tricking the Nymph. It was really interesting, and I like how he recognizes that what he has done may not have been the most moral thing to do. Yet he recognizes that this is the only way to save his crew. Overall I really enjoyed your story.

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